Thursday, September 22, 2011

Challenge Time!

Alright folks, it's time for another challenge from Rach Writes. Here are the rules -

Write a blog post in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should:
  • include the word "imago" in the title
  • include the following 4 random words: "miasma," "lacuna," "oscitate," "synchronicity,"
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional and included in the word count), make reference to a mirror in your post.
For those who want an even greater challenge (optional), make your post 200 words EXACTLY!
Ready for the challenge? Here we go!

Imago Sunset


"Listen up! We have one more sweep and then we're done.This time no one better oscitate along the way. Grange just got his stomachpumped; I can't imagine he'll be better anytime soon."

The group of men nod but I raise my hand. "Sir,wouldn't a mask be helpful on this expedition? I've heard of others talkingabout the miasma ---"

"Do you really believe in those fools tales?" Thecommander says, spitting. "Quit acting like a child."

I straighten my spine and set my jaw "Yes sir."

The troop marches in pairs out of the cave and into thecicada infested night, extermination guns in hand.

The sweep starts out as planned, each pair taking a sectionuntil the bugs no longer blanket the sky.

"What is that?" My partner asks.

I look up and see the cicada separate out forming a large, empty,circle in the night.

"Lacuna, the miasma formation…" I whisper.

My partner turns to me, "What?"

"This is no accident. Look, they're dividing intomirror images with perfect synchronicity. We're too late!"

"You mean ---"

"I mean the imago has occurred. If we don't leave now,we will be their next meal."

***
I'm #48 if you want to vote for me *nudge*

31 comments:

Sonia Lal said...

Hope they get out alive!


(I am 38 on the linky list)

Kathleen Doyle said...

Scary! Loved it! I definitely wouldn't want to face down a swarm of cicadas doing sychronized flying=)
(I'm number 49)

bridgetstraub.com said...

Nobody wants to be anyone's next meal! Well done. Mine is #29

Sher A. Hart said...

New follower here, going backwards up up the list. This is the first scary one I've read. Very tense, leaves a big lacuna in the pit of my stomach. I'm number 52 on the list.

K.T. Hanna said...

Loved this line:
"This is no accident. Look, they're dividing into mirror images with perfect synchronicity. We're too late!"

Really well done. Great use of the words. I'm #17

Kristin Baker Przybyla said...

Ooh! Cicadas creep me out anyway! You have my vote!

Jen said...

Very creepy! You've made great use of the challenge words here.
Mine is #3.

Christa said...

You are a brave girl and this is good. I would never take on a challenge like this. I tend to fall in Stephen King's camp about only writing in vocabulary you know:)

Sarah Pearson said...

This is my kind of story. I bet his partner gets eaten :-)

Fairview said...

Nice! I can totally visualize this. I love the killer-cicada concept!

Cat said...

I liked this a lot too, but it's Imago, not Imango.

J. A. Bennett said...

@Cat oops! My mistake. Thank you Cat!

F.E. Sewell said...

Oh no! Not the cicadas!

After this past summer I have a healthy fear of cicada swarms. One day my brother shook a couple of bushes in his yard and a MASSIVE swarm of cicadas flew out. Terrifying, I tell you. Absolutely terrifying.

Steph Schmidt said...

I changed cicadas to fluffy bunnies in my imagination to avoid nightmares. Cicadas are so so so sooo gross, poor guy was probably a red shirt too.

Cortney Pearson said...

Scary! I just wanted to tell the MC, follow your instincts! Bring your mask! This was well done.

Nadja Notariani said...

Ohhh..(shudders) cicada are the most disgusting creatures...perfect for your creepy story! ~ Nadja

Cheryl Reif said...

Eek! I agree, cicadas creep me out, especially en masse. Now could you please write this as a novel? I want to know the rest of the story

Sheri L. Swift said...

What an adventure! Wanted to read more! ; )

Sonia G Medeiros said...

How fun! I'd love to see more of this story. :D

Joanna said...

Creepy... nice suspense at the end!

Medeia Sharif said...

I hope they're able to get away. This was a suspenseful piece. Good job!

Krista M said...

Sounds a little scary and very suspenseful! Makes me wonder what an Imago really is. :) Great post!

Christine Rains said...

Oh, that was good. Great imagery and creeped me out. I don't like bugs at all!

Lady Jai said...

Awesomesauce! I hate cicadas...and an extermination force would be nice...had they gotten there in time! :D I'm #24! :D

Zan Marie said...

Gulp! I don't want them to get eaten!
Good job.

David P. King said...

I am incredibly late responding to this. This is super! Awesome dialogue. Creeper factor is there. Loved your sci-fi. Kinda had a Starship Troopers feel to it. You've got my sci-fi vote!

Great job, Jennie! :)

raelynbarclay said...

Great take on the challenge. Hooked :) I hope they don't get eaten.

Claire Hennessy said...

I really enjoyed this. Made me want to read on. Great job :)

Jessica Therrien said...

Yikes...great story. I really liked this one :)

Karen deBlieck said...

An original and wonderful story that was smoothly written. Thank you.

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