Tuesday, February 14, 2012

Is it Getting Hot in Here?

Happy V-day everyone! Love is in the air! I went on my first date with my hubby on V-day, and married him six months and two days later. So I guess today is good luck!

Anyway, what would V-day be without a few kissing scenes? Cassie May and Hope Roberson are hosting the Is it Getting Hot in Here? blogfest. I'm joining in with a scene from the book I am not working on (Earth Song), but I still love this scene so why not put it out there for all the world to see?




"What right do you have to be here? You abandoned me when I needed you the most. I know I said some harsh things, but that gave you no excuse."

Brenton stepped towards her. "Marion, I had good reason. I ---"

"I don't want to hear it," Marion said taking a step back,  hoping the sound of the river would block out anything Brenton had to say.

She had been alone, frightened, and unsure of what to make of her new-found powers. She could think of no good reason why they had been bestowed upon her, but she knew Brenton had something to do with it. She couldn't trust him for that reason alone.

"It's about your Aunt."

She looked down the slope to the river. There would be no escape here, not without going around him.

"Could you please move."

He stood his ground, his fists clenched at his sides. "If you'll just let me, I can explain everything. I didn't want to hurt you, but I had little choice."

Marion tried to walk around him, tried to ignore the pleading in his eyes. He took her arm as she walked past, forcing her to take him in. The bronze hair, the dimple in his chin. She wouldn't fall for it, not now. She had to be strong.

"Your Aunt wants to send you back to Falls Church."

Her jaw went slack. Hadn't she been longing to hear those words since the day she arrived in this nothing of a town? But right now, looking at Brenton, she couldn't imagine leaving. They had a score to settle, even if she was resistant to talk it out. She couldn't end things like this.

He closed the gap between them, not letting go of her arm. "I want you to stay."

Three things happened at once -- 1. Marion felt a weight lift off of her shoulders and she let control of everything she had pent up inside. 2. Brenton leaned in for a kiss 3. The earth moved, literally.

Forgetting that her emotions controlled her power over the earth she found herself tumbling, Brenton beside her, down the slope and into the river. It was shallow enough that she landed on her back without the water taking over.

Brenton landed half-way on top of her, his chest to hers.

Panting, Marion said just what she was feeling, "I want to stay, for you."

Fire was the only word Marion could think of to describe how it felt to have Brenton's lips on hers. The water flowing around them would have frozen her to the core had the fire not consumed them.

29 comments:

Juliana said...

Aw, so sweet! Love it!

Kyra Lennon said...

Excellent build up to a great kiss!

Kelley said...

Oh, 'I want to stay for you'.

And that is SO cool that the earth actually moves when they kiss :) Brilliant! :)

Dawn Ius said...

Awesome build up and a sweet kiss! Thanks for sharing!

I'm #52 on the hop :-)

Angela Quarles said...

Great build-up, I could feel their tension!

Gwen said...

Talk about a memorable first kiss!

Susan Oloier said...

The tension is incredible. I love the part where the earth moves and they tumble down the hill. Awesome scene!

Cassie Mae said...

So sweet! I love the intensity and the passion of it all. He just wants her to stay!!!

Morgan said...

Verrrry fun. Seems like a fab story ;) Thanks for sharing, J.A. :D

Krista M said...

Wow... very passionate and lovely! Great scene!

Mark Noce said...

The fire part on the lips reminds me of hot tamalies...but yes neat romance piece...although I doubt I'm the correct audience as romance in my favorite books often involves a bit more swashbuckling;)

Emily R. King said...

Love the movement. It kept me on my toes!

Melanie Fowler said...

awesome writing Jen!

Angela Cothran said...

I LOVE all the build up!!!

Theresa said...

I love the tension, the buildup, then the earth moving and that last line. Love it! More please :)

i'm erin. said...

I love, "He closed the gap between them...'I want you to stay'." It's like I can hear his voice. Perfect tension and emotional buildup! I love it.

Hope Roberson said...

Awesome intensity! I got chills! Your story sounds amazing, I wanted to keep reading!!! Happy Valentine's day :)

Jenny S. Morris said...

I loved this. The earth moving, and those last few lines. Awesome!

Laura said...

very cool scene - and very nice to meet you!
Lx

LynNerdKelley said...

I love this scene. Those new-found powers sound cool and scary, too! More, please!

David P. King said...

You're amazing, J.A. Great scene, great tension, great ending. And this isn't from Earth Song? Hmm. I knew you were keeping something from us! :)

Lynn(e) Schmidt said...

OMG, I LOVE THIS SOOOOOO MUCH J.A.!

It's nice to read your work! I love also that as they were about to kiss....they didn't get to. The water/fire thing is also awesome. Awesome job, chika!

Emily said...

Intense! I'm curious about her power over the earth. The earthquake/tumbling really heightened the emotion in this scene.

Great work!

Ashley Nixon said...

OMG! This was amazing! Great job!!

Kiru Taye said...

I love it when the earth moves during kisses, even literally. :)

Anonymous said...

That was really touching. Loved reading it.

Adrianne Russell said...

Agreed, now I want to know more about her powers!

Lisa L. Regan said...

WOW! Fantastic. I love the tension between these two.

Trisha said...

Love that the earth really DID move for them ;) Great excerpt!