I'm going to share the five best hooks (or chapter beginnings) from my novel EXISTENCE. Some of these hooks probably only mean something to me, as someone who knows the novel backwards and forwards. However, I'm going to start with the first hook, which should be the most important--and hopefully the best out of the five. Without further ado, here's some hooks.
"Chrissie Fox could taste the metallic sting of time on her tongue."
"The funeral was held three days later at the Rogers Family Mortuary."
"Chrissie sat cross legged on her bed, the pocket watch cradled in her hands."
"Matt put his arm around Chrissie’s shoulders, “It’s okay, love, I’m here.”
"Steel walls, steel door, steel bed frame. Chrissie had once wondered if CITTA had high security prison cells and now she knew the answer."
So there you have it. A few lines from my novel. I feel like I'm giving all my secrets away :)
I'm curious to know: in the books you've read, is there a first line that stands out more than others?
45 comments:
Sounds like things went a little south for Chrissie.
good hooks!!!!! I want to know what she did (or didn't do) :)
I'm reading Code Name Verity right now and I love the first line: "I am a coward."
I don't know that I've ever thought much about first lines of my chapters, aside from ch 1 of course. Hmm...now I need to go look at my WIP :-)
Love the first one! And the last one has me very intrigued. Nice job!
There are a lot of fantastic first lines out there, but one of my favorite first lines is from The Hunger Games--"When I wake up, the other side of the bed is cold."
Two first lines that stand out to me (meaning I even remember them) is the first line from Feed by M.T. Anderson “We went to the moon to have fun, but the moon turned out to completely suck.” and the first line from Rot and Ruin by Jonathan Maberry "Benny Imura couldn’t hold a job, so he took to killing." They definitely set up their stories really well!
Time has a taste? Yes. I'll read more, please! :)
Great hooks. Love love love the first one.
Nice. Poor Chrissie, though.
But isn't that always the case in books?
And I agree with Tasha about that first one. "time on her tongue"
Amazing hookers, especially the first one!
Ooh, your last line is intriguing!
Yes I do like the first line very much. But I'm also intrigued by the pocket watch.
These are awesome hookers (I'm sorry, but this has been cracking me up all day)! I'm really curious about what she did :D
These are great! I don't think you've given too much away, just enticed us to read more! :)
Yeah, line one is AMAZING! And the last one makes me NEED to know what is going one! So good!
very interesting, and 'hooking'.
Great hooks! Good job!
I like your hooks, I'm intrigued. Good job. :)
And for me it's not usually the first sentence that hooks me. I get pulled in by the first couple of sentences. :)
Yeah, I agree with Cassie. You've given nothing away, just teased me and made me want to know more :) Great job.
Love the last one! Very intriguing. The first one has some awesome stuff as well, enticing me to read on. Great job!
... the metallic sting of time on her tongue."
You got me. ^_^
The first one totally hooked me with time having taste. And the last one really pulled me in wanting more. Great job. Can't wait to read your hangers!!
WOW! Great lines. I'm particularly fond of the first and last ones :)
I always love a good secret - these hooks are really strong! I really want to know what's happening!! The first one is my favorite!
OMG! These were amazing! Number two was my favorite! Nothing like a good ol' funeral to entice the brain. LOL.
Good job!
Oh, poor Chrissie, sounds like she's getting into lots of trouble.
And as for first lines in books, Douglas Adams had some really great first lines.
I love the last one! It's quirky and at the same time, you definitely feel a sense of foreboding. Great lines! :) I can't wait to read your hangers!
The last one hints at so much! I love your hooks.
These are great! That last one makes me really want to read more!
Oh man! That first one is awesome! Conjures so many questions. LOVE it.
Thanks so much for participating!
terrific first lines! especially #1!
it sets the stage for the book! great job!
Great hooks. I really want to know what the last one is all about.
Okay, that first line is awesome. She can taste time? What? I need answers!!!
I just started Bring up the Bodies by Hilary Mantel, and it begins "His children are falling from the sky." I thought that was a pretty good hook :)
Sounds like a great story, Jenny!
Death, beds and love! I'm hooked:)
They are very good; I especially liked the first one. I only put a hook in my first chapter (too lazy to write more than one). But all the rest have cliff-hanger endings to drive the reader on.
Fun read! :-)
All the lines are fantastic... love the last one... is she in prison? I want to know:)
Wonder what happened? These are great. I love the first and last lines especially. Very nice rhythm and tone to the first one.
Wow - this is intriguing. Good job. I too want to know her story! Basically, "WTH happened?" is what I'm saying. hehe
'...metallic sting of time...' is definitely interesting
I really, really like the second one. Good work, J.A.!
Impressive! So, I'm wondering if time travel does something to the blood pressure or something and that causes the taste? Hmm...that's a def hook!
I love how time has a taste in your opening line. Never thought about it that way before. Awesome!
Perfect opening hook. The analogy is absolutely spell bounding!
Love these hooks, especially your opening one. You're right, that is the most important! :)
First one's my fave but they are all awesome!
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