The door swings open.
"Kray is dead."
I'm sitting at the kitchen table picking at a piece of toast and reading Bon Appétit. I don't even look up from the recipe for Heirloom Tomato Caprese.
"Mini, he was a stray cat. He probably had rabies, who cares?"
"Sandra are you out of your mind?" Mini says huffing over to the table and pushing the magazine down flat. "I saw this in a vision, remember?"
"Yes, and I'm going grillin' with Bobby Flay." I say picking up Bon Appétit again.
"Sandra, quit joking. I told you I would find him in that ditch." She says crossing her arms.
"Sure Mini." I say, flipping a page.
"That wasn't the only thing I saw." She says ripping the glossy leafs from my grasp and tossing them to the floor. "Even you reacted when I told you about Connor."
My spine straightens at the name. "Oh no, is he leaving today?"
"Yeeesssssss."
"We have to stop him, before he gets into that accident."
"That's what I've been trying to tell you." Mini says looking relieved.
I hit her in the arm, hard "You could have just said that in the first place. Let's go."
23 comments:
Wow, very good. I like how you think it's just about a dead cat, but it's more important. Great job! I'm off to post mine. :)
Thank you Krista! Can't wait to read yours ^_^
Good job! I want to keep reading. Go ahead and send it to me when your done. ;) Now I need to go write mine...
*you're* :)
Very nice, Ms. Bennett! ANd you made us want to read more. ;)
That is awesome! I love it!!
At first I thought a person was dead, lol. Then I thought we were only concerned about the cat. I enjoyed this very much! yay suspense!
This was great! So much with just so little!!
@Katie - ha ha, but I am done O_o
@Cherie - Thank ya missy :)
@Peggy - Do I get a cookie now? ;)
@Ashley - I wanted you to think someone was dead, so I'm glad that was the impression you got :D
@Jenny - are you writing one?
The ending was funny :D Great story :)
Ah Man! This is awesome! Very cool and intriguing! Great job!
I am working on my right now.
the blessing/curse of premonitions!
great build up and reveal!
I really liked the tension of knowing something dreadful was at stake while the character just kept focusing on recipes until . . . Nice job!
This was really succinct and well done. A great set-up for a story!
Very neat about turn there :-)
Those things are so easy to dismiss until they feature a loved one, aren't they?
Very well done.
Cool piece of writing.Mine goes up tomorrow.
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I like this! I want to read more. :)
I really want to know what happens to Connor. It's good how you don't know just how important it is until the end
I'm a first round judge for this competition and just wanted to let you know you've been picked as top five from my section to go through to round two in the campaigner challenge.
Congratulations!
@amiee Wahoo! I'm so excited :)
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